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Eyes of blood

Zoe GibsonPosted by Zoe Gibson 03 Nov, 2009 06:54PM
Eyes red with rage,
I tremble in anticipation,
Edging closer.
Just, moments away.

BANG!
It breaks,
As it meets my fist.
The vase shatters before me.

But it wasn't enough.
soft human flesh,
brittle bones,
was my true desire.


Posted by Joe Pearson 19 Nov, 2009 12:15AM

I know I'm always late in commenting on things, but I really, really like this. I think its one of your best poems.

I love it because its simple, and all the more affective because of it. It encompasses so much emotion and frustration into twelve little lines.

Posted by Martin Oakshaft 08 Nov, 2009 04:33PM

i think i might have mentioned to you earlier that i can totally relate to this poem.

i can see the frustration through the words. You have a knack of conveying a lot of feeling in your poems.

Posted by Zoe Gibson 04 Nov, 2009 10:26PM

lol that wasn't a typo the was just my bad spelling lol thanks though i didnt think it looked right. i'll change it now

Posted by Alicia Beavis 03 Nov, 2009 07:23PM

Oooh nice one zoe...short and to the point...one typo...end of 2nd line "antisapation" should be "anticipation"