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Alicia BeavisPosted by Alicia B. 01 May, 2009 11:27AM

Urm, well people seem to be writing good poetry, so I thought i'd throw mine into the mix. Not the best poem on here, but it was a challenge. "Write a poem with only 2 words on each line" I challenge you all to that too ;) Here goes:

Me you,
This room,
Deep pain,
No tears.


Eyes dry,
Heart crying,
No words,
Everything said.


Me you,
No more,
Loves gone,
Not here.


Both wronged,
Both shamed,
Never again,
The end!


Posted by Zoe Gibson 26 May, 2009 12:23PM

This was a great post and deserves the 100th post smiley. I agree with leif about the two words per line adding a power. As there is no real sentences structure just words with a lot of meaning behind them.

Posted by Alicia B. 01 May, 2009 07:24PM

Yeah, I remember our conversation about it. And yeah, so many posts so quick!

Posted by Leif Ahnland 01 May, 2009 07:02PM

You know I like this poem, we spoke about quite a while a g. The two-words-per-line give it a simple and powerful pace. I don't know how to analyse poetry or if this meter has a name even. But I like it.

And by the way, this one is post number 100. Congratulations to you and to everyone who helped make that happen. Well done!

The Librarian

Posted by Alicia B. 01 May, 2009 05:27PM

1) I'm sure they are just as well written.

2) I'm looking forward to reading it :)

Posted by Martin Oakshaft 01 May, 2009 03:17PM

...in that case, you might appreciate some of the stuff im going to post soon. its not as well written as this, but i think it kinda says something similar :)

Posted by Alicia B. 01 May, 2009 12:41PM

Thanks. Glad you can empathise with it, I myself have never been there.

Posted by Martin Oakshaft 01 May, 2009 12:38PM

Definitely a challenge, but you pulled it off very well.

i can totally empathise with the poem. once i got to the last line, i thought *i have SO been there*

:)