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Another Poem!

Alicia BeavisPosted by Alicia Beavis 22 May, 2009 08:33PM

Just want to get some feedback, and this is by far my least favourite poem that i've written. So much so I don't have a title! If you can suggest a title it would be appreciated! And yeah just any suggestions for improvement!

Open your eyes
Just realize
That love defies
Any pain that lies

Deep under the surface
Losing your loved ones, is it worth it?
It's your life don't curse it
Speak to me converse it

I'm here for you, i'll listen
These words right here i've written
To show you what your missin'
Smile, let your eyes glisten

Stop those tears from flowing
Be happy, there's no knowing
Someone could love you for showing
This life of yours your not throwing

Away into the darkness
I know your not that heartless
We can get you past this
Give you the strength to get a new life started

Your strong enough to get through
To live your life and pursue
The dreams you have and review
This painful life from which you withdrew