The Reason of the Beginning
Torc Aurora Oak was a pagan citizen in the village of Ecuomai. Now, Torc... everything was ordinary about him except one thing: he was a mage. Perhaps here you could give a few examples of how Torc is ordinary? You may think that was normal for a boy in that kind of world (You haven't yet said what kind of world it is, although there are things to suggest it's a fantasy world. But maybe - because you've got a great casual-sounding narrative voice here - you could say 'You don't know what kind of world it is? Well it's... Have you seen The Princess Bride? Like when Columbo makes comments on the story as he reads it. I love that!)but it wasn't. The pagan King Nuahda Mandala Chrysalis despised magic and banished any mage he could lay his hands on so Torc had to keep his powers secret.
It was a fine morning and Torc was walking to the market. As he was on his way he saw his friend Feather walking to the market too. He strolled towards her and as she saw him he saw [because it is through Torc's point of view] she hesitated wondering what to do. At last she fled. Torc was surprised - he and Feather had been friends for years.
As Torc was walking back he bumped into the King's guards. He fell, but just before he hit the ground he put his hands in front of him: he stopped in mid air. His heart pounded - if the guards had seen they would surely arrest him. "What you doin down ere this time of night, you should be at home my boy there are dangerous magids about." (Is this imagined speech or do they actually say it? I need to have more of the story so I can find out!) Torc had heard of magids in stories. His mother had told him they were supposed to be creatures of nightmare, sorcerers so powerful they could travel between worlds. ( please correct gramar mistaces )